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PostSubject: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Thu Sep 16, 2010 4:50 am

Here we gooo! The sequel to Stand up Strong is heeeere I love you

Summary: A bold gesture from Lucas to alter one person's sadness changed to wanting to save the entire world. Claus personally doesn't care for humanity but to help the wish of his twin come true. But is one heart alone big enough to alter the lives of many?

I tried to change the way I write this chapter and I'm definitely very satisfied with how it came out, if proud even!


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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Thu Sep 16, 2010 9:58 pm

(because ffnet keeps having server issues)

CHAPTER 1


A/N: And the time skip sequel to "Stand up Strong" begins! Aren't you all excited? I sure am! I tried to change the way I write this chapter and I'm definitely very satisfied with how it came out, if proud even!

Smoky hill

The Lightning tip

The charred house

The place where the sun sprinkles

Those were just some of the names the old home south of Tazmilly received over the four years that passed. One resident in the house gave it the name of 'the place where the sun sprinkles' because every sunny morning, the sun would shine through all the damaged holes in its stand. He was sound asleep despite sun rays shinning in from all corners of the old wooden structure. It shone directly on his messy blonde hair and warmed his pale skin as he continued to sleep. The higher the summer sun rose up in the sky, the more it covered the eroding house and the young man inside.

"Cluck, cluck, cluck."

"Cluck, cluck, cluck!"


Chickens found their way into the room and their little claws tapped around on the old damaged floor; they were gaining momentum to attempt flight to the soft platform where their blonde owner slept. One smaller hen succeeded at her attempt and claw-gripped way across the messy blankets and onto the bare back of Lucas.

"Ghh!" He rose up immediately while burying his fingers into the pillow he was once hugging in his sleep. He looked around until he heard the sounds of his chickens scattered about and felt the one pacing around on his bed. He replied to the rude awakening with a disapproving frown; he still wasn't very capable of scowling no matter what was dished out at him. He checked his sensitive back for cuts or blood which it thankfully did not have and carefully stepped out of bed. "I think I've slept in..." he murmured and tapped around the top of shelves and cases for his glasses.

His fingers traced against smooth steel that meant he touched the top frame of his glasses, because the the handles and nose of the glasses were bandaged to stay together until he could get himself a brand new pair. He placed them over his eyes and blinked to adjust; though still relatively blurry, he was able to finally see that he had indeed slept in.

"Oh gee, it's noon..." He sighed and pulled out the dresser drawer to find some clothes to wear outside. Unlike Claus, he didn't have the galls to walk around shirtless no matter how hot it was, neither did he have much to show off anyways. He was an average guy but was unaware how adorable he came off to the young women of Tazmilly. He came across sleeveless shirts that were all dark shades of colors made for heavy work. None of these were his, neither were the multiple pairs of cargo pants...

Oh. Right. I didn't do my set of laundry... whoops.

His cheeks flushed a deep red as he pulled out the dark blue pants and black sleeveless shirt. These were definitely not his colors or style choice, but it'd have to do, he had important tasks today; laundry could happen another day...or three. He was still taller than Claus, so the length of the pants were not a problem, but the shirt... so much was bared. He was hoping that no one would look at him for too long or ask why he was wearing Claus's clothes when he goes to town, this was hard enough as it was.

He looked at the fogged mirror and blushed even more, especially at the shade of his cheeks and his eyebrows crickled with embarrassment. His birds pecked at his legs to hurry up, they surely wanted to be let out to graze and get treated to a serving of grains. He grabbed a large beige hip bag and fastened it on; he at least remembered what he definitely needed and walked out of his room. He ignored his growling tummy, grabbed for the chicken feed and hurried out of the house. The sun temporarily made his vision even worse when it glared into his obsolete glasses. He winced for a moment until the chickens pecked at the bag in his hold.

"Hey, I know I'm late! But behave!" He scolded and shook them off and ignored their angry screeches. He went around the back side of the house where their fencing was and tossed plenty of grain into their bins before shutting the fence. Tying the bag up tightly and hiding it from any possible petty thieves or chimeras, he was now ready to go into town and to 'the old man's paradise'. He ignored the snooty glances of the 'sight see-ers' that often came to take pictures and talk about his eroding house and kept running north in a hurry.

"Lucas! What are you doing in Claus's gear? You're not muscular enough for his stuff!" Ritchie rudely shouted. The larger item shop was always the first thing seen from his entry to town, and always, Ritchie was there to shout at he and Claus. He wasn't one to argue and kept running to his destination. Not every part of Tazmilly was covered in fancy brick roads and brick buildings just yet, the east part of town was still very green excluding the new training ground where newly recruiting soldiers were trained at. To this day Lucas still couldn't fathom how Butch could sell the entire property to turn into some kind of noisy camping ground.

The thought crossed his mind every time he had walked past the place to where he worked, but where he spent his days at was just as depressing. The cold, poorly installed and wriggling doorknob he grabbed reminded him every single day. Upon entry, he would walk on wet, creaky floorboard worse than the one at his own home, moldy walls that had a lingering smell, and the saddened faces of the elderly strangers not even he could get to know; they were like shells waiting for somebody else that never came for them; some even developed a jaded sense of humor.

"Sarah, how about you go play hide and go sweep or pin the tail on the leak?"

"Okay grandma..."

Lucas didn't know the little girl personally, but he did at least know the name of her and the cold old lady named Margaret. He wondered what it was like having her as a grand parent, if he so much offered a cookie to the little girl, she would wince and say she couldn't take it, and do whatever 'play' she was suggested to do day after day. He shook his head and didn't see Nan who was likely with her growing daughter Alle, and if Linda wasn't downstairs, she definitely wasn't in at all. Ever since Mike's strange comment and her accusation of 'sexual harassment', she avoided going to the upstairs quarters.

Lucas had slowly been fixing up the upstairs part and it was a noticeable improvement compared to the wreckage downstairs he had yet to get to, but there was absolutely nothing that he could do about where the poor people laid their aging bodies for rest. Some were unfortunate to have springs poking through the mattress, so he croqueted them an extra layer to lay on. Eventually, he managed to make everyone their own colored layer for comfort, only a few expressed gratitude, but he didn't mind, as long as something was done about this. Neither did it net him extra pay he didn't care too much for, either. As urged as he was to continue his work, he was just so concentrated on something that involved old man Wess.

He entered his room and saw him sulking at a table. Usually he was a very boastful and prideful man, but as time reigned on, his spirit diminished more and more.

"Salutations...!" Lucas greeted hesitantly. The man's posture was just so heart breaking to witness, he wondered if something else had happened for him to be this way.

He was caught by surprise, but straightened his posture and answered, "Salutations..." He cleared his mumbly voice and asked, "what brings you here?"

Lucas laughed, "you bring that up everyday, Wess, but good thing you asked yet again!"

"Huh, why?"

"I'm going to investigate the where abouts of Duster! I've heard more rumors and they sound very promising. The description...the area where the river stops...it all adds up, Wess."

"...But why, Lucas?"

"Why what?"

"Why are you going through the trouble? You're much too kind..."

"Oh, Wess! Please don't question it! Duster deserves to be found and you deserve to have some happiness! When I get him, I'll definitely bring him back to you right away! Don't dwell on it!" Lucas exclaimed and hurried out of the room. He didn't want to get into a silly argument, and he was eager to see his theories through. He didn't run for the exit, but a few rooms over where the old frog was. He thought it was strange how the pigmasks imprisoned every old thing in here, animals and people alike.

The way the old frog stared at him day after day was as if it was trying to talk to him but couldn't reach out to him. When he thought about it, that wasn't the only frog that intently stared at, or even followed him. He shrugged and opened the door to see his grandfather staring at anything but the happybox on his desk. On the ground was Boney on a specially made mat from Lucas.

"Hi, Alec, hi Boney," Lucas greeted. He crouched down to Boney's level to pet him; he gotten even less active in his old age. It bothered Lucas how animals aged differently than he, thirteen years felt so little and yet Boney was always on his mat like the passed Scamp used to be in his bed. He winced at the thought of Scamp, he was sure that Boney had a few more in him. "Boney, wanna go on a walk with me today, boy?" The old brown dog peaked an eye open in reply and mumbled. "C'mon, Boney, pleeeease?" The dog sighed and stretched as his yes.

Lucas did come by with treats often, pet him often, and made him that ever comfy mat to lay on. He could accompany on a walk.

A walk he didn't know that was going to be many, many miles worth.

When Lucas stood up, his grandfather was still staring at the wall motionlessly without a word to him. Is he waiting for some kind of correct trigger? Lucas wondered. Or was he waiting for Claus to come see him and call him grandpa, the young man who grown to detest his existence and never acknowledged the fact he was recently moved into 'the old man's paradise'? He gave Alec a few seconds of hope of a reply before giving in and leaving with Boney. He quietly closed the door and made his way out of the staffless work place and back into the outdoors.

He recalled Wess stating that he restocked the back of the building with thunder bombs and though he didn't want to be resorted into using them, he knew he was likely going to have to when the going got tough. Inside were two thunder bombs in a little white box that was once wrapped closed with a silky red ribbon. The bombs made him think of Claus, they were certainly like him in nature; electrifying, explosive, kinda small but dangerous, the works. He smiled as he carefully pocketed them in his hip bag and hurried to town. Sleeping in today of all days was something he cursed himself for. If he hadn't he could've gone about this mission at his own pace, but now he needed to get as far as possible before it got dark.

His growling tummy also reminded him he slept past breakfast and was pretty much going through lunch time without a bite; he couldn't venture like this...! Stopping by Caroline's newly designed house and store hybrid, he stopped in front of the sliding glass doors that still amazed him somewhat. As pointless as they were, they were rather intriguing. Boney on the other hand hated these modern structures and rules; they all banished him. Oh how he hated the 'no dogs allowed' sign so much and how they said he was 'unsanitary'. How rude.

Inside, Angie was idly sitting down in her usually well mannered way in a pretty yellow sun dress that showed her matured body type nicely. She was always pretty young, but grown up more beautifully than she gave herself credit for.

"Hello, Angie!" Lucas quickly gotten flustered when he saw her surprised, but bewildered expression. He had forgotten he was wearing Claus styled attire.

"Haha, Lucas, you look like Fuel in that. Are you trying something new? Trying to show off to single ladies or something?" She chuckled and made her way over to her good friend.

"Aha...no, it's just I forgot to do my chores and had to borrow an outfit of his..." He chuckled sheepishly. "Angie, I have several favors to ask."

"Oh? Go on," she encouraged.

"First, I need pen and paper," he said.

"Okay," she replied and and went to get the pen and paper. "I'm still in ear shot, by the way!"

"And can you, if available, get some doggy biscuits and plenty of nut bread or bread rolls!"

"Huh, really? Why?"

"Going on a trip, don't say anything for me? "

"Uhh, sure, sweetheart." She returned with a modern pen and some modern accented paper. Lucas didn't mind, he just needed to quickly write his letter and get going before things got complicated. "Thank you for all of this," he stated with a smile and began quickly writing his letter.

"Are you uh, going on a far trip...?"

"Possibly...I dunno, I'm just taking precautions," he answered truthfully.

"Lucas...you're not doing anything dangerous, are you?" Angie sternly asked with the carefully wrapped goods.

"Well it's not like I'm jumping into the face of dangers, I just know that danger is a possibility," he answered truthfully yet again. Lucas just didn't have a lying bone in his body.

"So why won't you take Claus with you? He's a tough, strong guy that can go through anything and you'll be safe," she sternly advised with a hand on her hip. "Nobody wants you hurt, or poisoned, or worse: eaten out there!"

"Oh, Angie! I'll be fine, I'm not a helpless person!" Lucas was on the verge of whining adorably, but this was a serious peeve of his. While he knew they cared, he was as much of a capable adult as the rest of them. "Please don't send Claus out after me, he's over worked as it is."

"I won't, but you should know he'll be hot on your trail the second he notices," Angie answered and shrugged.

Lucas couldn't help but chuckle at that statement because it was so true. He exchanged the neatly folded paper for the goodies that was able to fit into his bag.

"Thank you so much, Angie. Also, Fuel should be here soon for his usual break, give him that letter, please."

"Alrighty. Be careful, Lucas! Don't drop your glasses again, and don't think too much while walking that you walk into something again! Those flimsy things need to be replaced and should've been ages ago!"

"O-okay, Angie...B-bye!" He exclaimed and hurried out to escape the nagging. He had a doggy biscuit in hand and gave it to Boney. "Bon-bon, c'mon, it's time to go. I'll bribe you with this entire bag of doggy biscuits if I have to."

He had absolutely no qualms with this and agreed wholeheartedly.

Lucas knew he definitely didn't have the funds to take a train and get tickets to the D.C.M.C concert, so he had to do the brave thing and enter the the train tunnel with his ever loyal and hungry dog.
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Thu Sep 16, 2010 10:25 pm

Wow, I gotta say, you're really good at this...

You capture the characters and the atmosphere of Tazmilly so well, it's truly impressive.

I really enjoy reading your stories! Part of me wants to ask you to do an original story of your own, but your fanfics are so good that I wouldn't want you to stop.
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Fri Sep 17, 2010 1:23 am

Everyone asks me to do an original story but I'm not sure why, though lol I feel there isn't enough good fanfiction out there, so I want to put some good ones into the pool. That, and its fun to put a great set of characters into new situations.

I also like to mimic the creator as closely as possible while doing something new, as if the person who made the characters is putting them in new situations and stuff. I believe you call this "original flavor".

I might do an original story someday, but for now I'm really enjoying giving people good fanfics to read that aren't all recycled shipping fics lol.

Glad you like it, though. I'm very proud of how the premiere chapter came out and experimenting with the way I describe things.

I was also trying to throw actual game happenings in there without taking too much space for the flow. Like mentioning the sexual harassment but not the scene, mentioning the girl who played hide and go sweep, the thunder bombs etc

I can't wait to do boss fights and big chimera fights and etc.

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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Fri Sep 17, 2010 11:13 am

I'd like to see you do an original story because I'd like to see your fantastic writing in an original story of your own.

However, as I said, I wouldn't want you to stop doing these fanfics either.
I especially enjoy these Stand Up Strong ones.

If there were more fanfic writers as good as you, then I wouldn't avoid fanfics like the plague.

So stick with fanfics if that's what you enjoy doing most, I sure won't complain. Writing is just another art form, another means of self-expression. And works done without passion behind them are never very good. So I wouldn't want you to do an original story if it would be a work of labor with no passion or enjoyment behind it.
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Mon Oct 04, 2010 9:50 pm

lol I wish there were more fanfic authors who tried to mimic the source materials with something new... but as they say when something's not being done, do it yourself.

Also rare update: http://www.fanfiction.net/s/6328192/2/

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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Mon Oct 04, 2010 11:18 pm

ALRIGHT! I was afraid you stopped writing this.

This one is much more exciting than the last, yet it still retains the same familiar atmosphere as the first.

I notice it stopped just before the infamous "rape" Rolling Eyes scene. (Seriously, how dirty are peoples minds that they saw rape in that scene? I don't even know...)
Anyway, can wait for the next one, keep 'em coming!
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Tue Oct 05, 2010 6:13 am

Haha to this day I'm like, "how do people see this as rape when the game is going LOL BAPTISM at the least?" originally I wanted this chapter longer, scene hop being at the submerge, but I thought I really needed a chapter+author note combination and went with stopping the chapter there.

Though I did get to do what I mostly wanted to do: Display chimeras, his interactions with them, and the multiple ways to handle them. While sneaking in subtle battle actions and stuff Surprised
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Tue Oct 05, 2010 9:33 am

You did really well with the Chimera descriptions, encounters, battles, interaction, etc.

You captured Lucas' initial reaction to each Chimera remarkably well, it felt very organic, and portrayed the reaction a young boy would have to a never before seen animal/creature quite accurately.

Very nice work.
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Tue Oct 05, 2010 10:29 am

It's in Lucas's personality, which I had the most fun writing. His love of animals and nature still persists, even when they're vicious and distorted the way that they are. He's also leaving his bubble of Tazmilly for the first time, something Claus has already done---but then again, Claus has been exposed to tons more than he had.
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Tue Oct 05, 2010 11:31 am

Curimuch wrote:
It's in Lucas's personality, which I had the most fun writing. His love of animals and nature still persists, even when they're vicious and distorted the way that they are. He's also leaving his bubble of Tazmilly for the first time, something Claus has already done---but then again, Claus has been exposed to tons more than he had.


And that's what I love about your writing. It's so true to the source material that everything feels familiar as though you're reading an actual licensed part of the story, and your writing sort of brings the world to life within the narrative and the attention to detail, but I feel your greatest triumph here is your ability to capture the characters so well, using only your imagination.

It's like, Lucas really didn't have much of a personality in the MOTHER 3 game, he was for the most part, a silent protagonist. However, you have managed to craft for him a personality that not only fits the character, but captures exactly how you'd imagine him to be.

That's my problem with other Fanfics, the writer takes too many liberties with the story and the characters, and everything ends up being more of a grossly warped misrepresentation of the original source material. So when you read it you're like, "Oh, this is crap... ___ wouldn't say that" or "___ & ___ wouldn't end up together!" and so forth.
And it's not that I have anything against Fanfic writers sort of tweaking the story/characters here and there, but it just doesn't wok for me when they take a beloved character and mess with their personality to better suit their taste, or build a romance between 2 characters that just wasn't there and never could be, and I especially despise when Fanfic writers of MOTHER 3 love to turn all the characters into overly cliched anime archetypes... Lucas isn't emo, Claus isn't the token Sephiroth-style super villain, Kumatora isn't Tsundere, etc.

Your work clicks with me because it remains faithful to the source material, yet still incorporates your imagination into the story/characters. I really can't put it into words either, but there's like this unique atmosphere that your writing begets as well, it's just very...I dunno. I'm at a loss for words here, so forgive how crudely I put this, but it's as though you're right there in the story, watching the events as they unfold before your very eyes. And all the familiar imagery as seen in the game is there along with the atmosphere, but at the same time it's as though I'm seeing the world through your eyes rather than my own. It's like, the whole world as seen in the game, but in 3D, and in a style that I myself didn't see it in until I read your work.

I hope that makes sense, cause I can't think of any other way to put it...
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Tue Oct 05, 2010 12:15 pm

Blk_Mage_Ctype wrote:
Curimuch wrote:
It's in Lucas's personality, which I had the most fun writing. His love of animals and nature still persists, even when they're vicious and distorted the way that they are. He's also leaving his bubble of Tazmilly for the first time, something Claus has already done---but then again, Claus has been exposed to tons more than he had.


And that's what I love about your writing. It's so true to the source material that everything feels familiar as though you're reading an actual licensed part of the story, and your writing sort of brings the world to life within the narrative and the attention to detail, but I feel your greatest triumph here is your ability to capture the characters so well, using only your imagination.


Yeah that's my goal when I write fanfics. Amusingly enough, my writing style confuses people into asking "isn't fanficing supposed to be what ifs/what you would think would happen if so and so happened" but...what I'm doing IS but in the form of mimicking Razz Sometimes I do spin offish stories, but more often I do what I'm doing here. Trying to make it feel like it rolled out of the creator's finger tips.

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It's like, Lucas really didn't have much of a personality in the MOTHER 3 game, he was for the most part, a silent protagonist. However, you have managed to craft for him a personality that not only fits the character, but captures exactly how you'd imagine him to be.

It's like how people say Mario doesn't have a personality only because he doesn't speak frequently, but I feel that he does, it's just up to the person's imagination to expand on it. What I choose to do is to expand on it as realistically as possible, as close as possible with the basics that I was given to expand on. So it's good to hear our ideas on Lucas is similar.

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And it's not that I have anything against Fanfic writers sort of tweaking the story/characters here and there, but it just doesn't wok for me when they take a beloved character and mess with their personality to better suit their taste, or build a romance between 2 characters that just wasn't there and never could be, and I especially despise when Fanfic writers of MOTHER 3 love to turn all the characters into overly cliched anime archetypes... Lucas isn't emo, Claus isn't the token Sephiroth-style super villain, Kumatora isn't Tsundere, etc.


looool amusingly enough... I recently gotten a clone fic that was partially what you said. I linked to the review page where the person called the writer out.
"This seems like a really hallowed out and shallow version of the fanfics here "Stand up strong" and "The Audacious March"."

I was amused when I read the review and the actual story, though lol

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Your work clicks with me because it remains faithful to the source material, yet still incorporates your imagination into the story/characters. I really can't put it into words either, but there's like this unique atmosphere that your writing begets as well, it's just very...I dunno. I'm at a loss for words here, so forgive how crudely I put this, but it's as though you're right there in the story, watching the events as they unfold before your very eyes. And all the familiar imagery as seen in the game is there along with the atmosphere, but at the same time it's as though I'm seeing the world through your eyes rather than my own. It's like, the whole world as seen in the game, but in 3D, and in a style that I myself didn't see it in until I read your work.

I hope that makes sense, cause I can't think of any other way to put it...


Awww I got it, thanks a lot! That's what I want to do, I want people to see what's in my imagination, my head. Whenever I play video games with simple graphics, my head turns it into this huge and fleshed out world and then I choose to write fanfiction to share my imagery I received while playing/thinking through it (: Now that I'm in the game's plot...rather altered plot, I still want to make it familiar with the change of events (what with Claus being alive and all) and the effect those differences have. I foresee this fic lasting another year or two...lol
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Tue Oct 05, 2010 2:19 pm

Curimuch wrote:
Yeah that's my goal when I write fanfics. Amusingly enough, my writing style confuses people into asking "isn't fanficing supposed to be what ifs/what you would think would happen if so and so happened" but...what I'm doing IS but in the form of mimicking Razz Sometimes I do spin offish stories, but more often I do what I'm doing here. Trying to make it feel like it rolled out of the creator's finger tips.


Yeah, I really like it better when they stick to the source material at least a bit.

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It's like how people say Mario doesn't have a personality only because he doesn't speak frequently, but I feel that he does, it's just up to the person's imagination to expand on it. What I choose to do is to expand on it as realistically as possible, as close as possible with the basics that I was given to expand on. So it's good to hear our ideas on Lucas is similar.


Well, that's actually what I meant when I said that you captured Lucas' personality. He did have a personality, it just wasn't there on the surface is what I meant. On the surface, Lucas after the 2nd Chapter become mostly a silent protagonist, but you can still get an idea on who he is based not only on what he said in the first 2 Chapters, but also just sort of based on how the other characters interact with him, and by the things that happen to him as the story progresses.

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looool amusingly enough... I recently gotten a clone fic that was partially what you said. I linked to the review page where the person called the writer out.
"This seems like a really hallowed out and shallow version of the fanfics here "Stand up strong" and "The Audacious March"."

I was amused when I read the review and the actual story, though lol


LOL

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Awww I got it, thanks a lot! That's what I want to do, I want people to see what's in my imagination, my head. Whenever I play video games with simple graphics, my head turns it into this huge and fleshed out world and then I choose to write fanfiction to share my imagery I received while playing/thinking through it (: Now that I'm in the game's plot...rather altered plot, I still want to make it familiar with the change of events (what with Claus being alive and all) and the effect those differences have. I foresee this fic lasting another year or two...lol


Well, you've got a hell of an imagination, Curi.
And I certainly won't mind if it last a year or 2. I look forward to reading future chapters as you write them.
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Fri Nov 12, 2010 7:24 pm

Mojo has slightly came back

working further on chapter 3 ohmai
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PostSubject: Re: MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8   Fri Nov 26, 2010 6:53 pm

here have a preview its on the way

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MOTHER 3: The Audacious march - 1-24-12 Chapter 8

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